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"Poem 01" by William Teo aka Eterna2

SF&F Picture 4 out of 4 by William Teo aka Eterna2

Come and take my pain away...

Satan's Night
© 2002 - 2003 William Teo

Tears to stream
And blood to sea
Gone with breeze
A shattered dream

Eyes to close
And heart to cease
Death unleased
A mournful ghost

Satan's night
A devil stays
So gone today
My path of light

But smiled tonight
For blood I gave
A devil's slave
An evil's guide

Devil prince
Master since
Come again
And take my pain

Away

Tonight

A Satan's night

←- Misc 01 | Times of Sorrow -→

Date	Name	Comment
23 Mar 2004	L. Shanra Kuepers	Loading... It's a tad bit sad that the rhyming scheme here is inconsistant, I think this is one of those works where rhyme just works really really well and makes infinitely more powerful. Please don't misunderstand, this is a very good poem still, but it could be better. I like the way this is set up technically, it's unusual, but very nice all the same ^_^ Okay, I've been swamped in writing, rewriting, reading, homework, more homework, social life problems, dreams and generally being beatness, so the emotional side seems a bit lacking right now. But that is my fault not yours! It's hard to connect to poems when tired. It's a very good poem though ^_^
28 Nov 2004	Anonymous	Loading... I don't usually comment on anything, but I really like your work. Espessaly this poem.
23 Jan 2005	Anon.	Loading... Wait uh im a little lost, i like it but are you a satanisim person?? Not to judge you or anything cuz i write poems that dont relate to the real me at all
22 Apr 2005	Ellen	Loading... i think i'm in love. You have passion. Keep at it or I'll kill you.